MSTs for the hell of it...
Feb. 5th, 2005 03:12 amDani has a new person on her flist. Fickle checked out that person's fiction because she's bored. Fickle is now mocking the hell out of said stories.
"Put your hands up or die!" Yelled a masked person that looked just like Marick.
Forgive me for asking the obvious question, but if the person was masked, how do you know whom they looked like? Unless this 'Marick' person is renowned for walking around with a mask on.
"Yeah what master Marick just said!" Yelled another masked figure that looked like Isis.(Ish-she-zoo)
Wow. Another person whom you can identify because of their mask. Who apparently refers to 'Marick' as 'master Marick' instead of something like 'brother'.
"What's happening?" Tea said as she walked towards Marick.
"T-Tea?!" Marick and Isis both took off their masks and looked to see if their eyes were going Goo Goo.
...They looked with their eyes to see if their eyes were doing something that I don't even understand? Pretty advanced skills they have.
Seto stepped in luggage in his hands and his arm was bloody murder. He looked as if he was on his last leg. But that didn't stop him from punching Marick so hard that it left a bruise.
Seto's arm was bloody murder? Just on its own? Amazing. And strangely enough, I was under the impression that bruises took a while to form as opposed to appearing right after a punch. Even a hard one.
"Seto!!!! Why the heck did you do that." Screamed Tea so LOUD that the whole airport could hear her.
Nice to know that you're not at all curious about whyMarik Marick and Isis were holding up an airport. I won't even comment on the fact that you make statements instead of yelling questions.
"Can't you guys see that I'm dying here." Seto then began crying he didn't know why but he knew his last hours were coming. He felt sick after he got shot by Marick.
...no we can't see that. Since, you know, nobody told us that you were shot, and this is the first time that it's been mentioned. The writer must have been confused as well; there's no other explanation for why Seto would be crying. Or even saying something like that instead of just snapping for the nearest nurse.
"Seto, how about we go to First Aid and get some bandages for your wound." So Tea and Seto went off to the first aid station.
Because of course bandages are enough to fix a bullet wound.
"Will I die?" Seto started crying again.
"Will I ever be IC again?"
"No you are just fine" The awfully sexy nurse said.
Is her sexiness important, or is this just very bad fanservice?
Then Tea and Seto Hugged each other for joy. They both blushed ten shades of red and pink.
Seto's last name is apparently 'Hugged'? That explains why he's been acting so OOC - he's not Seto Kaiba, he's Seto Hugged. *sigh of relief* This story seems so much better already - look at how the author even counted how many different shades they blushed!
MSTing ends here for Fickle to get some sleep.
"Put your hands up or die!" Yelled a masked person that looked just like Marick.
Forgive me for asking the obvious question, but if the person was masked, how do you know whom they looked like? Unless this 'Marick' person is renowned for walking around with a mask on.
"Yeah what master Marick just said!" Yelled another masked figure that looked like Isis.(Ish-she-zoo)
Wow. Another person whom you can identify because of their mask. Who apparently refers to 'Marick' as 'master Marick' instead of something like 'brother'.
"What's happening?" Tea said as she walked towards Marick.
"T-Tea?!" Marick and Isis both took off their masks and looked to see if their eyes were going Goo Goo.
...They looked with their eyes to see if their eyes were doing something that I don't even understand? Pretty advanced skills they have.
Seto stepped in luggage in his hands and his arm was bloody murder. He looked as if he was on his last leg. But that didn't stop him from punching Marick so hard that it left a bruise.
Seto's arm was bloody murder? Just on its own? Amazing. And strangely enough, I was under the impression that bruises took a while to form as opposed to appearing right after a punch. Even a hard one.
"Seto!!!! Why the heck did you do that." Screamed Tea so LOUD that the whole airport could hear her.
Nice to know that you're not at all curious about why
"Can't you guys see that I'm dying here." Seto then began crying he didn't know why but he knew his last hours were coming. He felt sick after he got shot by Marick.
...no we can't see that. Since, you know, nobody told us that you were shot, and this is the first time that it's been mentioned. The writer must have been confused as well; there's no other explanation for why Seto would be crying. Or even saying something like that instead of just snapping for the nearest nurse.
"Seto, how about we go to First Aid and get some bandages for your wound." So Tea and Seto went off to the first aid station.
Because of course bandages are enough to fix a bullet wound.
"Will I die?" Seto started crying again.
"Will I ever be IC again?"
"No you are just fine" The awfully sexy nurse said.
Is her sexiness important, or is this just very bad fanservice?
Then Tea and Seto Hugged each other for joy. They both blushed ten shades of red and pink.
Seto's last name is apparently 'Hugged'? That explains why he's been acting so OOC - he's not Seto Kaiba, he's Seto Hugged. *sigh of relief* This story seems so much better already - look at how the author even counted how many different shades they blushed!
MSTing ends here for Fickle to get some sleep.
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